This is phenominal.
With that said, if I were to be a hopeless pedant, I'd have to say that 'lament' stands out as being another grade up in reading level. I know you're not actually going for childrens-english in writing style, it just stood out so I thought I'd mention it.
Speaking as an adult, I find the language choice there to be glorious.
With that said, if I were to be a hopeless pedant, I'd have to say that 'lament' stands out as being another grade up in reading level. I know you're not actually going for childrens-english in writing style, it just stood out so I thought I'd mention it.
Speaking as an adult, I find the language choice there to be glorious.
